Here is my very first edit of some of the footage that I have collected, along with a directors commentary about the improvements we could make.

IMPROVEMENTS; 

This is the very first take of the film after the first day of filming, looking back at it after editing I have analysed the footage, as well as getting feedback from others, to find out what is good about it and what needs improving.

In the pan shot at the start it loses the smoothness towards the end, making it quite jumpy so I will need to re-film that shot. Also, the protagonists feet move which does not look very profesional so the whole shot will need to be filmed again.
Some people that fit into my target audience said that they liked the fact that the pan shot starts out of focus and gradually focuses on the protagonist, giving it a dream like effect as some people said.




This second video is some audience feedback that we have collected from another media student to see what he thinks is good, what is bad, and what can be improved on our video.